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One Last Step, One Last Breath by ~yoriku:iconyoriku:



I take another step, I feel it all again
All the pain, it was once hidden
But now, now it's showing once more
Shown to myself, the world and to you

Running, hiding, it's all become tiresome
The brief times of happiness I have
All the sadness that I bear
This act, this show, I put on for you

My breathing is hard, hurtful
I feel the room closing around me
I've lost myself to the emotions
Everything once locked, now opened

All those shadows, haunting me
And the stories, all reminding me
OF the times we shared, the love
The happiness, and then, the sadness

I remember you, wanting you in my arms
Reminiscing about everything
Your words, your dreams, and then…
My sorrow, and my pain

You triggered it once more
My heart, beating faster, harder
My breath, loud and heavy
It’s all back to me again

I take another step, another breath
Another dream, another hope
Something lost, and something gained
You’ve gave it all, and more

You loved me, and you hurt me
I’m falling down into my hole again
Falling once more, unaware of it
And yet, it’s all still there, for me

One last step, one last breath
One last dream, and then…
Then, it’s all over again
It never happened
Never will
©2005-2008 ~yoriku
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Submitted: May 24, 2005
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This is another one of my poems that I wrote as if I was someone else. This is from my friend's point of view. Recently she had a run-in with an ex that she still cares about, and he told her that he does too, but she's afraid that he doesn't mean it. She's also in another relationship, locked down with him. The poem is just kinda about what's going on through her head as it all unravels to her. The emotions becoming stronger towards the end, developing into more pain. Something that we all wonder, is what if that person did mean it, and we don't know? Or even more so, what if that person is saying it, and doesn't mean it? You make your choice how it feels at the end.

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~f3ark1t:iconf3ark1t: May 24, 2005, 6:36:08 PM
Wow...Nice...

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~yoriku:iconyoriku: May 24, 2005, 9:59:44 PM
Thanks? Hehe... something I'm starting to get used to, I guess... reading people.
@limetastic:iconlimetastic: Jun 1, 2005, 10:21:57 AM
I liked it better when I read it out loud because I felt I got the full effect. It's really sad to me but I feel as if I can relate which is why it makes me sad. Excellent wording, as usual. :hug:

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*leolekia:iconleolekia: Jun 7, 2005, 10:13:43 AM
very nice. the idea carries through well. It gives me the image of someone who just got punched in the stomach trying to walk it off. very good emotion.

~Leo

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Dan, I will always remember that day. Mandla, you where always so nice. A great friend. RIP
~yoriku:iconyoriku: Jun 20, 2005, 10:24:08 PM
Heh, I'll take that as a compliment.... Though, I don't particularly like making people feel depressed. I don't know if that's good or bad. >> And, I'm sorry that the poem is something you can relate to. It hurts to know that people suffer through having to go through ordeals that take their heart away. Heh, best wishes though. <3
~yoriku:iconyoriku: Jun 20, 2005, 10:25:54 PM
Hehe, take it I did better on this one. ;) Anyways, thanks. I don't know if the punched effect is what I was going for, but hey, why not, eh? It's always nice to get feedback from you though, you usually have constructive criticisms. :3
@limetastic:iconlimetastic: Jun 21, 2005, 7:23:03 AM
Yeah, it was a compliment, just not a very happy one. Everyone has to go through heatache in order to grow. I'm fine for the moment I think. :)

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Lyme Disease: Do you know about it? Probably not, so read this and learn what you can do to spread the word.
Are you CFS aware?
*leolekia:iconleolekia: Jun 21, 2005, 12:09:55 PM
Thank you. I try to only give constructive comments because thats what i hope people will give me. I am glad my attempts do not go unnoticed.

~Leo

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Dan, I will always remember that day. Mandla, you where always so nice. A great friend. RIP